Talk:Local government elections held in Balochistan, Pakistan
Neutrality
editThe first sentence is analysis, non-neutral. Likely it can simply be deleted without detriment to the article. --Pi zero (talk) 04:16, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
- What you mean? Is this article not fit for wikinews? --FSCEM45212 (talk) 04:26, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
- I haven't tried to do a full review of the article (I really can't right now; it's almost midnight where I am and honestly I need sleep). Most reviews involve some minor revisions; most articles have some things that need revising during review. The first sentence here has some difficulties, which I remarked on above. With some thought, I or some other reviewer may well be able to revise to eliminate the difficulty with the first sentence. I mentioned it here for the benefit of whoever reviews the article — whether it's me or someone else. --Pi zero (talk) 04:36, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
- Should I remove the first sentence? --FSCEM45212 (talk) 04:45, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
- That's a possible solution. There may be other ways to fix the problem; also, I or another reviewer may be able to revise during review. --Pi zero (talk) 04:52, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
- I also note that the headline needs revision. Per WN:Headline, a headline should be a sentence (without a "." at the end); this one is currently a noun phrase. Also, we don't use appreviations such as "govt." in headlines. --Pi zero (talk) 04:52, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
- Then how can I change the headline to "Local government elections in Balochistan, Another step towards democracy". If you are capable of changing the headline, then change it. I wrote govt. in headline of article just because I wanted to shorten the headline as you told me.--FSCEM45212 (talk) 05:17, 8 December 2013 (UTC)
Review of revision 2219334 [Not ready]
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Review of revision 2227975 [Passed]
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Revision 2227975 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:13, 10 December 2013 (UTC).
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