Talk:Japanese professional wrestler and Netflix star Hana Kimura dies aged 22

Review of revision 4565770 [Not ready]

Revision 4565770 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 22:28, 23 May 2020 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not ready: when ; see below. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: See below. Comments by reviewer: @Chandlerjoeyross: The lede needs some work. There's no "day word: no answer to "when" the focal event happened. There's no attribution; where does all this information about what happened come from? This lede feels a bit long and over-detailed; I get that the facts here are complicated, but if they're that elaborate one should find a way to answer the five Ws and H more succinctly, and elaborate the details in a second paragraph. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 4565770 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 22:28, 23 May 2020 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not ready: when ; see below. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: See below. Comments by reviewer: @Chandlerjoeyross: The lede needs some work. There's no "day word: no answer to "when" the focal event happened. There's no attribution; where does all this information about what happened come from? This lede feels a bit long and over-detailed; I get that the facts here are complicated, but if they're that elaborate one should find a way to answer the five Ws and H more succinctly, and elaborate the details in a second paragraph. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review of revision 4565813 [Passed]

Revision 4565813 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 04:19, 24 May 2020 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Please avoid using the Daily Mail as a source. There were some passages too close to source (oughtn't happen). The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4565813 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 04:19, 24 May 2020 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Please avoid using the Daily Mail as a source. There were some passages too close to source (oughtn't happen). The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

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{{makeprotected}} And yet another. Please sight or reject my cat addition. Heavy Water (talk) 14:34, 30 October 2023 (UTC)

Done --SVTCobra 15:16, 26 December 2023 (UTC)