User:Nzgabriel/Youth Parliament help

After reading this page, please see this page, User:Nzgabriel/Youth press gallery article.

I am planning on becoming a press gallery member at the youth parliament in New Zealand this year. And to enter I can submit some, or one (not sure) of my article(s) I have written.

I need help with this, as I am not sure on which ones are my best ones, etc. I have selected Wikinews exclusive: 'speed not behind New Zealand's road toll', Minimum wage to be increased in New Zealand, Apple launches iTunes in New Zealand, A1 Grand Prix Taupo, New Zealand results, and New Zealand ex-politician gives valedictory speech. But those are just some, I haven't really looked at all of them, and that is why I am asking for your help.

A full list of the articles I have written, or contributed significantly, is here: User:Nzgabriel/Article list.

For more information about New Zealand's youth parliament and becoming one of youth parliament's press gallery member, see this website: http://www.myd.govt.nz/ayv/youthparliament/youthparliament.aspx.

If no one else is going to come into this discussion, then my decision is to submit the article of Don Brash giving his valedictory speech. --Nzgabriel | Talk 07:55, 15 March 2007 (UTC)
  • The article you're proposing is a good start to give a single story, but you should probably link to your entire list of contributions as well. You've done a lot round here and that should be pointed out in your application.
From reading the details, they want 10 youth reporters - and you might end up on TV. You need a 500 word piece on what you believe should be one of the issues discussed by the youth parliament and I'd suggest you do that here in your userspace. --Brian McNeil / talk 11:22, 15 March 2007 (UTC)
Yeah, I have been told by a person at the Mistry of Social Developemt/Youth Development, that I can still submit a story, but I have to write a 500 word 'essay'. I could do that here in my userspace, but I would prefer not to have people publicly altering it, as it would then look like I didn't really write it all, and it would be other people's writing, etc. --Nzgabriel | Talk 03:00, 16 March 2007 (UTC)
Stick a "please do not edit" message at the top that asks critique details go on the talk. Our regulars will understand that constructive criticism should go on the talk page. In that way you can get help and advice from the community without the piece having been edited by anyone else. If this sounds like cheating, it isn't. Everyone else who is trying for this will have their English teachers helping with their submission. The difference is you'll have a record of how your work developed and an honest list of who advised you in creating your submission. Do you have a topic to pursue yet? --Brian McNeil / talk 10:22, 16 March 2007 (UTC)
The topic will be about the driving age of New Zealand, as this is a hugely debtated topic as it is currently 15, and many people argue that it is way too young. The driving age is also attributed to why there are so many youths dying on our roads. --Nzgabriel | Talk 05:40, 17 March 2007 (UTC)
  • That sounds like a good piece to do. You've already done coverage of the topic, so you have a story or two to go with your submission. --Brian McNeil / talk 09:42, 17 March 2007 (UTC)
When I said you'd done coverage, I meant Wikinews exclusive: 'speed not behind New Zealand's road toll'. --Brian McNeil / talk 08:33, 18 March 2007 (UTC)