Comments from feedback form - "It should be less wordy in ord..."

Ok. Thanks for your feedback. I tried to do my best while not copyvio the source. Maybe you should join the Newsroom and help copy edit articles before they are published.

Mattisse (talk)19:16, 23 June 2011

I submitted your suggested copy edit. It has to be approved by a Reviewer.

Mattisse (talk)19:20, 23 June 2011

Approved. Thanks everyone. :)

Blood Red Sandman (Talk) (Contribs)19:27, 23 June 2011

Thank you, Blood Red Sandman!

Mattisse (talk)20:26, 23 June 2011