Talk:US scientists create prototype of autonomous origami-inspired robot

Past tense

Paragraphs 3 and 4 ("Once the battery is attached to the design, ...") should be in past tense. --Gryllida 06:56, 8 August 2014 (UTC)

Miura-ori and its unusual properties

Quote:

The folding pattern studied by Cornell-led research team is well-known in origami Miura-ori. Its unusual properties were noticed first by Chris Santangelo of the University of Massachusetts, Amherst.

Well known for what? What unusual properties? This paragraph may need to be more specific. --Gryllida 06:58, 8 August 2014 (UTC)

It may be a nice idea to mention a couple adjectives to describe the primary features of Miura-ori, i.e. how it's different ("this origami is done by folding along parallelogram lines"). An average reader would not know this. --Gryllida 07:01, 8 August 2014 (UTC)

(Note that I did not remove the paragraph; I moved it one paragraph top.) Gryllida 07:01, 8 August 2014 (UTC)

Review of revision 2799654 [Passed]

Revision 2799654 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:32, 10 August 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: One whole sentence was essentially from source, so need restructuring. I wonder if there's something about your work technique that's allowing these to slip through? Overall the number of such incidents has been dropping, but honestly, it shouldn't happen at all. The EurekAlert! items are published by EurekAlert!. Treat the university (or whatever) as the syndicate, which goes in the author field of the citation. Though I agree with the above commenter that the tenses are a bit tangled up — and news writing is strongly encouraged to use a single tense consistently throughout — it's not actually illogical: the previous paragraph says the design was "described" (in the past) as having (relative now) various characteristics, and the paragraph starting with "Once the battery is attached" continues the description. Not ideal, perhaps, but workable. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 2799654 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:32, 10 August 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: One whole sentence was essentially from source, so need restructuring. I wonder if there's something about your work technique that's allowing these to slip through? Overall the number of such incidents has been dropping, but honestly, it shouldn't happen at all. The EurekAlert! items are published by EurekAlert!. Treat the university (or whatever) as the syndicate, which goes in the author field of the citation. Though I agree with the above commenter that the tenses are a bit tangled up — and news writing is strongly encouraged to use a single tense consistently throughout — it's not actually illogical: the previous paragraph says the design was "described" (in the past) as having (relative now) various characteristics, and the paragraph starting with "Once the battery is attached" continues the description. Not ideal, perhaps, but workable. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

• Btw, non-free images are not ideal. It's usually better to use images that can be used as freely as possible, so as not to create complications for syndication of our articles. --Pi zero (talk) 15:28, 11 August 2014 (UTC)