Talk:US political pundit Bre Payton, 26, dies suddenly

Lede

@William S. Saturn: I think some parts of the lede can be moved to the lower part of the article, especially the information about reaction. Don't you think it is not the lede material, more like the background information? I am sure independent reviewers can more that part, but well, it may change the fluidity.
•–• 17:54, 30 December 2018 (UTC)

I disagree. A good lead should be the largest paragraph. It includes the most important parts of the story.--William S. Saturn (talk) 21:02, 30 December 2018 (UTC)

I posit a third view; a good lede can and often should be brief, but in this one I think all those details go towards establishing the significance Payton had and are fine in the lede. BRS ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 21:18, 30 December 2018 (UTC)

• It might be an idea to add the designator 'U.S.' to the headline, as I gather she focused on domestic politics. BRS ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 21:18, 30 December 2018 (UTC)

Colleagues of any deceased have things to say, so that really isn't the most significant part of the story.
117.198.182.230 (talk) 21:21, 30 December 2018 (UTC)

I too was thinking the US ought to be added into the headline.

The second sentence one could imagine shifting down, yeah; we'll see how that goes. --Pi zero (talk) 21:34, 30 December 2018 (UTC)

Actually I reckon the final sentence of the lede is a better candidate to move down... BRS ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 22:45, 30 December 2018 (UTC)

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