Talk:UN's Convention on Domestic Workers expected to take effect in 2013
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editShould use downstyle capitalization (like a sentence, rather than like a title). --Pi zero (talk) 05:56, 8 September 2012 (UTC)
Review of revision 1617350 [Not ready]
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Revision 1617350 of this article has been reviewed by Bddpaux (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 22:21, 8 September 2012 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: An excellent start to what I'm confident will be an excellent article. However, the 2nd paragraph consists only of two sentences. The 3rd paragraphs consists of only 1 very long sentence. Generally speaking, the lede needs to be stated in somewhat simpler terms. "[...} after the Philippines deposited its ratification of the convention [...]"- -that's probably some sort of Euro-English turn of phrase, but for a red-blooded American fellow like m'self, I'm left scratching my head as to what that REALLY MEANS. Good work on Wiki'fying so many terms!! --Bddpaux (talk) 22:21, 8 September 2012 (UTC) Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 1617350 of this article has been reviewed by Bddpaux (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 22:21, 8 September 2012 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: An excellent start to what I'm confident will be an excellent article. However, the 2nd paragraph consists only of two sentences. The 3rd paragraphs consists of only 1 very long sentence. Generally speaking, the lede needs to be stated in somewhat simpler terms. "[...} after the Philippines deposited its ratification of the convention [...]"- -that's probably some sort of Euro-English turn of phrase, but for a red-blooded American fellow like m'self, I'm left scratching my head as to what that REALLY MEANS. Good work on Wiki'fying so many terms!! --Bddpaux (talk) 22:21, 8 September 2012 (UTC) Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Review of revision 1617785 [Passed]
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Revision 1617785 of this article has been reviewed by Tom Morris (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 09:07, 9 September 2012 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Style issues from previous review have been handled. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 1617785 of this article has been reviewed by Tom Morris (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 09:07, 9 September 2012 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Style issues from previous review have been handled. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Review of revision 1617785 [Passed]
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Revision 1617785 of this article has been reviewed by Tom Morris (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 09:08, 9 September 2012 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Style issues from previous review have been handled. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 1617785 of this article has been reviewed by Tom Morris (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 09:08, 9 September 2012 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Style issues from previous review have been handled. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |