Talk:South African 'Lion Man' killed by his lions

Review of revision 4503173 [Passed]

Revision 4503173 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 15:32, 22 August 2019 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Work on attribution; I added a good deal during review. (See history of edits during review, as always.) We use the term obituary for an article that includes biographical information about the deceased. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4503173 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 15:32, 22 August 2019 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Work on attribution; I added a good deal during review. (See history of edits during review, as always.) We use the term obituary for an article that includes biographical information about the deceased. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

"CNN neighbors"

Clarifying my edit summary because I treated Culinan as the speaker, which it is not. ... So, if we take the sentence "Connie Moganedi, a spokeswoman for the police department of nearby Cullinan, told CNN neighbors from other lodges nearby attempted, but were unable, to save van Biljon." and eliminate what's between the paired commas, we get: "Connie Moganedi told CNN neighbors from other lodges nearby attempted to save van Biljon." In this simpler sentence, it appears to me we need something between CNN and neighbors. For example, I wouldn't write "Bill told Jim Bob is a nice guy." It should be, "Bill told Jim, Bob is a nice guy." or "Bill told Jim that Bob is a nice guy." Cheers, --SVTCobra 17:36, 22 August 2019 (UTC)