Talk:Kennedy assassin Sirhan Sirhan stabbed in California prison

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Pi zero in topic Review of revision 4508430 [Passed]

Can this be made more fluent?

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"They also said that they believed they had identified the attacker" seems a bit clumsy to me, probably due to the subclauses and the repetition of "they". M!dgard (talk) 18:47, 31 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Yes, but so can you. Work with what's available from the sources or add more. Wikinews is a collaborative effort. --SVTCobra 19:42, 31 August 2019 (UTC)Reply
Keeping in mind the importance of attribution, which does demand some indirection. --Pi zero (talk) 19:45, 31 August 2019 (UTC)Reply
Midgard, feel free to edit the draft however you see fit. The first drafter often does most of the work but there is no prohibition whatsoever on you doing as much or as little as you like, and I personally find that this makes for the best articles. Darkfrog24 (talk) 18:46, 1 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

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