Talk:Indian cricketer Sehwag announces international retirement
Review of revision 3912955 [Not ready]
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Revision 3912955 of this article has been reviewed by Cirt (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 08:21, 21 October 2015 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Unfortunately, article needs lots of work, per comments, above. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 3912955 of this article has been reviewed by Cirt (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 08:21, 21 October 2015 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Unfortunately, article needs lots of work, per comments, above. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
I've added some more details, and added back in a few words of quotation in reactions from fellow players. While I agree that there was too much quoted at the time of the first review, some indication of what his colleagues said is appropriate I think. I've also attempted to improve the article with some copyediting etc and hope that someone can review this soon - I now can't as I'm too involved! Bencherlite (talk) 10:57, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- Great job, Bencherlite (t · c · b), thank you very much for your help ! I agree with you both that there was too much quoted, before, and that some quotes are helpful and your improvements are helpful and quite beneficial. It looks like a 2nd Review is currently taking place by Pi zero (t · c · b). Good luck, -- Cirt (talk) 12:20, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
Move request
edit@Cirt: Please Move the page to Indian cricketer Sehwag announces retirement
14.139.242.195 (talk) 08:43, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- Done, great new title ! -- Cirt (talk) 10:15, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- Actually, he's not retiring from all forms of the game so this title is misleading. Pinging Pi zero (t · c · b) in the hope that he sees this before publishing. Bencherlite (talk) 13:31, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- Would inserting 'international' save it? Seems that's the "most important and unique thing." Indian cricketer Sehwag announces internetional retirement? BRS (Talk) (Contribs) 13:35, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- I think you mean "Indian cricketer Sehwag announces international retirement" (methinks you type "internet" too often!), which would work. Bencherlite (talk) 13:42, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- My thanks to you both. :) -- Cirt (talk) 15:38, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- Lol. BRS (Talk) (Contribs) 01:30, 22 October 2015 (UTC)
- I think you mean "Indian cricketer Sehwag announces international retirement" (methinks you type "internet" too often!), which would work. Bencherlite (talk) 13:42, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- Would inserting 'international' save it? Seems that's the "most important and unique thing." Indian cricketer Sehwag announces internetional retirement? BRS (Talk) (Contribs) 13:35, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
- Actually, he's not retiring from all forms of the game so this title is misleading. Pinging Pi zero (t · c · b) in the hope that he sees this before publishing. Bencherlite (talk) 13:31, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
Review of revision 3914520 [Passed]
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Revision 3914520 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 14:25, 21 October 2015 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 3914520 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 14:25, 21 October 2015 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |