Talk:Haitian cholera victims threaten United Nations with lawsuit
Review of revision 1895757 [Not ready]
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Revision 1895757 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 02:29, 9 May 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: I renamed the article to comply with Wikinews:Style guide#Headlines. I hope in the future this will not be required. Please read so the article does not need to be renamed again for capitalization. Looking at the inverted pyramid above, the top part wants the answer to who, what, where, when, why and how. Looking at the first sentence, I do not see the what referenced in the headline I do not see the when. I do see a who. I do not see a how for how they came to be infected. Wikinews:Style_guide#Wikilinking an article really needs to be referenced. I did the first link as an example. No sidebox. No images. No categories. This suggests other fundamental problems with the article beyond the cursory review because it is clear other published articles were not looked at for modelling. Student template was removed. Should be clear based on modeling these do not belong on articles. Wikinews:Cite sources#Citing sources needs to be cited. It is clear it has not been reviewed because of lack of consistency. It is kind of like writing a research paper, mixing APA, MLA, Turabian and Chicago style citation styles in a paper. You just do not do that, especially if the instructor says write in APA style. While reviewers do not mind little fixes, removing an errant 0 or a adding a few letters when month has been shortened, the presence of major flaws indicates the citing sources was not read. When the easy things have been fixed, (please do asap so this stays fresh) then fuller review can be done to get closer to publish ready. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 1895757 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 02:29, 9 May 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: I renamed the article to comply with Wikinews:Style guide#Headlines. I hope in the future this will not be required. Please read so the article does not need to be renamed again for capitalization. Looking at the inverted pyramid above, the top part wants the answer to who, what, where, when, why and how. Looking at the first sentence, I do not see the what referenced in the headline I do not see the when. I do see a who. I do not see a how for how they came to be infected. Wikinews:Style_guide#Wikilinking an article really needs to be referenced. I did the first link as an example. No sidebox. No images. No categories. This suggests other fundamental problems with the article beyond the cursory review because it is clear other published articles were not looked at for modelling. Student template was removed. Should be clear based on modeling these do not belong on articles. Wikinews:Cite sources#Citing sources needs to be cited. It is clear it has not been reviewed because of lack of consistency. It is kind of like writing a research paper, mixing APA, MLA, Turabian and Chicago style citation styles in a paper. You just do not do that, especially if the instructor says write in APA style. While reviewers do not mind little fixes, removing an errant 0 or a adding a few letters when month has been shortened, the presence of major flaws indicates the citing sources was not read. When the easy things have been fixed, (please do asap so this stays fresh) then fuller review can be done to get closer to publish ready. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Apologies
editI have since edited as per your recommendations. I will continue to work quickly on this story to get it published.
Review of revision 1895945 [Not ready]
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Revision 1895945 of this article has been reviewed by Gryllida (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 08:35, 9 May 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Please rewrite the first paragraph for it to contain a minimal amount of details required to answer the Who, Where, When, What, Why, How questions. Please also consider having more than one sentence in each paragraph to ease readability. Thank you. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 1895945 of this article has been reviewed by Gryllida (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 08:35, 9 May 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Please rewrite the first paragraph for it to contain a minimal amount of details required to answer the Who, Where, When, What, Why, How questions. Please also consider having more than one sentence in each paragraph to ease readability. Thank you. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Review of revision 1898502 [Passed]
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Revision 1898502 of this article has been reviewed by DragonFire1024 (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 19:17, 12 May 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 1898502 of this article has been reviewed by DragonFire1024 (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 19:17, 12 May 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |