Talk:Arizona, Florida, Illinois hold 2020 US presidential primaries; Ohio postpones

Notes

• Not tied to the title, but there are essentially three stories being covered, so its clunky
• Sourcing notes (not to be construed as suggesting that the sources shouldn't be read in full, but just for help locating where facts are specifically available for verification; most facts are in more than one of the sources, only one listed here)
  1. Primaries in three states, Biden won all: NBC, first sentence
  2. Ohio postponed: NBC, third sentence; Tweets; NBC update titled "Tuesday's pandemic primaries: Everything you need to know" (need to scroll down a lot, its from 3/17 at 11:41 AM PDT), also the one titled "Ohio primary called off at last minute due to health emergency"
  3. Trump is the presumptive nominee: NBC update titled "Trump is now the presumptive GOP nominee, NBC News projects"
  4. Democrats use primaries and caucuses, delegates needed: Bloomberg, Warren end US presidential campaigns following Super Tuesday
  5. 441 delegates: NBC update titled "5 things to watch as Arizona, Florida and Illinois vote during coronavirus mayhem"
  6. Republicans use primaries and caucuses: obvious, wikinews coverage
  7. Republican delegates needed, Trump count, presumptive nominee: The Hill
  8. Biden and Sanders totals: NBC update titled "Biden wins Arizona primary to cap three-state sweep, NBC News projects" (also confirms 1991 delegates needed)
  9. Sanders lost in 2016: NBC update titled "Tuesday's pandemic primaries: Everything you need to know"
  10. Awarded proportionally: In Special:Diff/4553317, the added content is copied verbatim from Bloomberg, Warren end US presidential campaigns following Super Tuesday, which is listed under related news and was used as a source
  11. Ohio postponed: see above (number 2)
  12. Tweets: The Tweets
  13. National Emergency, pandemic: prior coverage at US President Trump declares COVID-19 national emergency, listed as related news and used as a source
  14. Ohio is one of six, DNC urges mail in: NBC, update titled "DNC urges states to stick to primary schedule, adopt vote-by-mail instead"
  15. Klobuchar, bill: NBC, update titled "As pandemic throws elections into chaos, advocates call for national vote-by-mail"
  16. Maryland rescheduling: NBC, update titled "While Maryland delays primary, special election to replace Cummings will stay mail-in only"
  17. Cummings death: US Representative Elijah Cummings dies at age 68
  18. Klobuchar was a candidate: Prior wikinews coverage in Super Tuesday article

--DannyS712 (talk) 19:31, 18 March 2020 (UTC)

The article needs to have a focus. Not three foci. I could fix the headline (we've always been more flexible about reviewers changing headlines); the question is whether the lede will then sufficiently match the headline, or could then be made to match the headline with a very small tweak. --Pi zero (talk) 03:19, 19 March 2020 (UTC)

Okay, I've tried something. --Pi zero (talk) 03:31, 19 March 2020 (UTC)

If you're on IRC we can coordinate --DannyS712 (talk) 03:32, 19 March 2020 (UTC)

I like the new title. I'm not a fan of the "United States state" construction. Darkfrog24 (talk) 21:27, 20 March 2020 (UTC)

"US state" isn't as bad as "United States state", but I wasn't enthused about using it in a headline, let alone at the start of a headline. It just doesn't feel as succinct as one wants a headline to be. --Pi zero (talk) 21:56, 20 March 2020 (UTC)

Review of revision 4553858 [Passed]

Revision 4553858 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 22:09, 20 March 2020 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: This relies awfully heavily on the NBC source. The introduction of a second source for basic elements of the focal event doesn't do much to alleviate this extensive dependence for later content of the body. Please plan for more redundancy and variety of sourcing, going forward. The sourcing notes on the talk page were helpful; without them I might not have noticed that the NBC source is missing a lot of supplementary content when viewed without javascript (which is how I usually view sources during review unless a reason emerges to bring javascript into the equation). Though this further highlighted the over-dependence on NBC. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4553858 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 22:09, 20 March 2020 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: This relies awfully heavily on the NBC source. The introduction of a second source for basic elements of the focal event doesn't do much to alleviate this extensive dependence for later content of the body. Please plan for more redundancy and variety of sourcing, going forward. The sourcing notes on the talk page were helpful; without them I might not have noticed that the NBC source is missing a lot of supplementary content when viewed without javascript (which is how I usually view sources during review unless a reason emerges to bring javascript into the equation). Though this further highlighted the over-dependence on NBC. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Thanks --DannyS712 (talk) 22:14, 20 March 2020 (UTC)