Talk:12 Palestinians, possibly more, drown trying to get aid parcels dropped into the sea

Commas

I feel like commas should be added after the words "Palestinians" and "possibly more" making it

"12 Palestinians, possibly more, ..." The Master of Hedgehogs (talk) 17:22, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

Thank you. BigKrow (talk) 18:35, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

Bumped back to developing status

I bumped this one out of the queue because of a couple of issues with style. There is a red link that can be fixed. The image needs to be attributed using the {{image}} template. Also, numbers below 20 are normally spelled. Infoboxes are also typically used—they provide links to other articles. You might get away without one, but they've always been added to my articles if I didn't originally include one. Also, there is no Gaza category so it too is a red link. Maybe that category should be created. Michael.C.Wright (^Talk/_Published) 17:42, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

I fixed the broken link (but not the category), attributed the image, added an infobox, and did some copy-editing to include removing redundant statements. But removing those statements makes the article pretty short and now also in need of expansion. I think the title could be shortened to something like "Palestinians drown trying to get aid parcels dropped into the sea."

Feel free to change or even revert my changes.

Michael.C.Wright (^Talk/_Published) 18:16, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

Thanks Michael!!! BigKrow (talk) 18:36, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

Dates????

Twelve people drowned trying to reach aid dropped by plane off a Gaza beach, Palestinian health authorities said on Tuesday, or is it Monday??? Conflicting dates..... BigKrow (talk) 18:41, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

https://www.msn.com/en-in/news/world/12-gaza-residents-drown-in-attempt-to-reach-airdropped-aid/ar-BB1kAKjX BigKrow (talk) 18:41, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

Reuters or CNN???

Eyewitness accounts and footage obtained by CNN, also by Reuters??? BigKrow (talk) 18:53, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

Review

I know for a fact that this is not ready for publication.... BigKrow (talk) 21:19, 29 March 2024 (UTC)

I'll remove {{under review}} so you can work on it if you want to. Heavy Water (talk) 01:50, 30 March 2024 (UTC)

No, please finish just saying it needs copyediting... 64.39.81.54 (talk) 02:11, 30 March 2024 (UTC)

BigKrow (talk) 02:12, 30 March 2024 (UTC)