Talk:United States judges block third version of President Trump's travel ban

Review of revision 4357700 [Passed]

Revision 4357700 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 22:38, 21 October 2017 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: The lede should be short and get straight to the point. Don't let it get long enough to be at risk of rambling. Also, if it makes sense for the paragraph to start with a summary sentence, that sentence should probably be the whole lede (perhaps beefed up just slightly), with the rest split off into a separate paragraph. The opening words as submitted, "This week, [...]", are a warning sign: when needs to be answered specifically, whereas "this week" is summary. Sourcing on the Wednesday event is not redundant, I believe? Routinely provide redundancy on something that's part of the focus. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4357700 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 22:38, 21 October 2017 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: The lede should be short and get straight to the point. Don't let it get long enough to be at risk of rambling. Also, if it makes sense for the paragraph to start with a summary sentence, that sentence should probably be the whole lede (perhaps beefed up just slightly), with the rest split off into a separate paragraph. The opening words as submitted, "This week, [...]", are a warning sign: when needs to be answered specifically, whereas "this week" is summary. Sourcing on the Wednesday event is not redundant, I believe? Routinely provide redundancy on something that's part of the focus. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.