Talk:Scottish police arrest two over Glasgow apartment death

Review of revision 1819707 [Not ready]

Revision 1819707 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 10:32, 24 February 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not ready: Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: Comments by reviewer: Times should have colons. Much of the article is written in passive voice. Why "Have arrested" instead of "arrested"? I am having an issue of place confusion. Is this really the whole of the United Kingdom or is it just Scotland? If it is just Scotland, it should be more clear. To be brutally honestly, I am having a really difficult time following the events in this story. There are a lot of dates, a lot of people mentioned and there appears to be little logic as to when things appear. The newsworthiness is not clear in the lead. When was the arrest actually made? This does not appear anywhere in the lead. The only recent event describes a future event that takes place tomorrow. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 1819707 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 10:32, 24 February 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not ready: Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: Comments by reviewer: Times should have colons. Much of the article is written in passive voice. Why "Have arrested" instead of "arrested"? I am having an issue of place confusion. Is this really the whole of the United Kingdom or is it just Scotland? If it is just Scotland, it should be more clear. To be brutally honestly, I am having a really difficult time following the events in this story. There are a lot of dates, a lot of people mentioned and there appears to be little logic as to when things appear. The newsworthiness is not clear in the lead. When was the arrest actually made? This does not appear anywhere in the lead. The only recent event describes a future event that takes place tomorrow. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review reply

I'm afraid I must object to your review for the following reasons:

• Times do not necessarily require colons.
• The use of the expression 'Strathclyde Police have arrested' makes more sense then saying 'Strathclyde Police arrested' because the specific time of the arrest was never actually reported in the sources. In any case, reporting the time of the suspects' expected court appearance is of significant importance to the story.
• As to whether or not this story involves 'just Scotland' is subjective. In any case, Scotland is in the United Kingdom, so the use of the term 'UK' should be fine here, although admittedly specifying Scotland might have been a better idea since the article references the procurator fiscal, which only exists in Scotland.
• One would have thought the reader would have been able to understand all the events, dates and times referred to in the article.
• What exactly you mean when you say "there appears to be little logic as to when things appear" I do not know. What exactly did you mean by that?

In any case, I would have thought minor issues like these could have been easily rectified without simply failing the review. --Rayboy8 (my talk) (my contributions) 13:38, 24 February 2013 (UTC)

Review of revision 1821141 [Passed]

Revision 1821141 of this article has been reviewed by Tom Morris (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 09:36, 25 February 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1821141 of this article has been reviewed by Tom Morris (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 09:36, 25 February 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

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Could you please add Category:Ryan Peteranna (Wikinewsie), it seems I neglected to do so myself. --Rayboy8 (my talk) (my contributions) 16:57, 24 March 2013 (UTC)

Done --Pi zero (talk) 17:23, 24 March 2013 (UTC)