Talk:San Diego State University pitcher taken first in baseball draft
Peer review 1
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Revision 832092 of this article has been reviewed by Calebrw (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 16:03, 10 June 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Just needs a bit of work. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 832092 of this article has been reviewed by Calebrw (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 16:03, 10 June 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Just needs a bit of work. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
- I added 3 more sources. Please re-review. Thanks! --Jayron32.talk.contribs 23:20, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
Review revision 832397
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Revision 832397 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 00:41, 11 June 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Baseball --SVTCobra 00:41, 11 June 2009 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 832397 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 00:41, 11 June 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Baseball --SVTCobra 00:41, 11 June 2009 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Good job
editSorry I was not able to improve this article or re-review it. It looks really good, with a very solid writing style.
I noticed two things for possible improvement:
- Quotes. Your story needs them. Could be the number 1 draft pick, a coach, an analyst, etc. Could also be something simple or something complex.
- Why were Pirates? and Twins teams who benefited? Explain that a bit and it plugs that hole nicely.
All-in-all, very good, but always room for improvement. Calebrw (talk) 06:30, 11 June 2009 (UTC)