Talk:Russia leases submarine K-152 Nerpa to India for ten years

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  • Comment This is a mishmash of active/passive voice, and tenses. It also, 'technically', fails NPOV for use of the word prowess; that is not only inappropriate for a description from Wikinews, it is incorrectly used here.
  • And, in the second paragraph, "[...] took control of the submarine from Bolshoi Kamen, a port town [...]". was the submarine controlled by the town? Because, that's what you've written.
I would normally not highlight these errors, and simply correct them; but, I am coming to the conclusion that these errors will persist until pointed out. This article could be failed on-the-spot based on these points, but it would be far, far better were the original author to take on-board these issues, fix them, and avoid the same in the future. --Brian McNeil / talk 20:23, 23 January 2012 (UTC)
The active/passive voice issue does not appear to have been addressed, and the tense problem actually appears to be worse ("will have enhanced"). --Pi zero (talk) 21:43, 23 January 2012 (UTC)

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