Talk:Palestinian president pleads with UN Security Council for help in Gaza
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Revision 749243 of this article has been reviewed by TUFKAAP (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 08:23, 7 January 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Yes, I failed my own revision! Anyways, the article could be fleshed out a bit more, but hey dipolmatic wordgames are what they are... mostly quotes while the fun stuff goes on behind closed doors, TUFKAAP (talk) 08:23, 7 January 2009 (UTC) Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 749243 of this article has been reviewed by TUFKAAP (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 08:23, 7 January 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Yes, I failed my own revision! Anyways, the article could be fleshed out a bit more, but hey dipolmatic wordgames are what they are... mostly quotes while the fun stuff goes on behind closed doors, TUFKAAP (talk) 08:23, 7 January 2009 (UTC) Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Headline and style
editIt might be just me, but I think the real headline story here is not the diplomatic wordgames, but the planned change on the ground: the humanitarian corridor. This is planned to open an hour from now, so perhaps there is not time to rewrite the article (I can't) so maybe that is an approach for a second article today.
This article is not written in pyramid style, but I don't think that matters considering the speed of changing events, and the diversity of the quotes.
Review #2
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Revision 749551 of this article has been reviewed by TUFKAAP (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 02:17, 8 January 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: You didn't have to remove the Ban Ki-moon quote, just reword it, TUFKAAP (talk) 02:17, 8 January 2009 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 749551 of this article has been reviewed by TUFKAAP (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 02:17, 8 January 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: You didn't have to remove the Ban Ki-moon quote, just reword it, TUFKAAP (talk) 02:17, 8 January 2009 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |