Talk:Chinese girl who was hit and run by two drivers, ignored by eighteen people, dies

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Fetchcomms in topic This title doesn't make sense

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This title doesn't make sense edit

Was the girl ignored by 18 people or were the drivers ignored? fetch·comms 18:31, 22 October 2011 (UTC)Reply[reply]

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Examples:

  • who was hit and run by two van drivers; Hit and run is not a verb. Needs rewording to avoid misusing the English language.
  • who was hit and run by two van drivers, then disregarded by eighteen passers-by - 18 passers-by disregarded the two van drivers? Doesn't anyone pay attention to van drivers in China?
  • last week shows the onlookers pass her' should be onlookers passed her; did it happen in the past, or are they continuing to pass her? Or what?
  • Should be hyphens in "Two year old" and "58 year old", as in "Two-year-old" and "58-year-old".
  • The local government is now looking to bring in a law ??? What is meant here? How is a government "looking to bring in a law". Does it mean the government is looking into passing a law or is the government looking to bring in a law from somewhere else?

Needs editor familiar with English to fix!!! —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Antidisestablish (talkcontribs)

"Rubbish" is a synonym for "garbage" edit

Synonyms for garbage - junk, refuse, rubbish, trash, waste.

Synonyms for rubbish - Garbage, junk, refuse, waste.

e.g. The rubbish is collected every Thursday in Gloucester, but on Wednesdays in Cheltenham. —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Antidisestablish (talkcontribs)

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