Talk:Australian–US team of scientists finds Atlantic warming causes Pacific climate trends

Review of revision 2791878 [Passed]

Revision 2791878 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 23:30, 6 August 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: This had various distance-from-source problems, most especially at the end of the second-to-last paragraph. That entire two-sentence sequence was essentially copied from source and then superficially "scuffed up" by use of synonyms and such. Don't do that. I have, on this occasion, made edits demonstrating the sort of thing one needs to be doing (at a minimum) to that sort of passage; but I'm really pushing the limits of reviewer's purview, and mustn't do as much on a regular basis. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 2791878 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 23:30, 6 August 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: This had various distance-from-source problems, most especially at the end of the second-to-last paragraph. That entire two-sentence sequence was essentially copied from source and then superficially "scuffed up" by use of synonyms and such. Don't do that. I have, on this occasion, made edits demonstrating the sort of thing one needs to be doing (at a minimum) to that sort of passage; but I'm really pushing the limits of reviewer's purview, and mustn't do as much on a regular basis. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

• Stylistically, this lede is also weak in that it really should be much shorter. For instance, when I made it a lead on the main page, my summary sentence read

A team of scientists from Australia and US has found an explanation for why increasing greenhouse gases have not weakened the equatorial Pacific trade winds as expected.

--Pi zero (talk) 23:39, 6 August 2014 (UTC)