User talk:ElizabethLittle/Sydney Opera House celebrates its 40th birthday

Review of revision 2080004 [Not ready]

Revision 2080004 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 01:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not ready: See below. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: See below. Comments by reviewer: I'm readily finding passages here that are clearly source passages copied and "scuffed up". Don't do that; it produces close paraphrase that does not avoid plagiarism. While synthesis draws its facts from the sources, the presentation should be entirely original to you — your choice and arrangement of facts, your sentence and phrase structure, your words and turns of phrase, avoiding peculiar word choices and turns of phrase from the sources. After you've done all that, there's likely no significant similarity to the source presentation remaining, but as a sanity check, you shouldn't have more than three consecutive words identical to a source, with obvious exceptions like titles. See WN:PILLARS#own. Here, for example, the sentence starting "Traditional Aboriginal ..." is close paraphrase from the Euronews source, except for the final clause which is copied from the ABC source. That's just an example; I've readily found others and probably stopped before finding all of them. Rewrite to address all such problems before resubmitting. The article comes across rather bullet-like, with every paragraph being single-sentence. Although one-sentence paragraphs are sometimes okay, nothing but one-sentence paragraphs produces this bullet-like effect. "One thought, one paragraph" produces better flow. The article is a bit short. Consider the standard description of minimal length for a standalone article: "about three medium-sized paragraphs". Pretty clearly, a one-sentence paragraph is short; so content equivalent to three medium-sized paragraphs, however it's distributed into paragraphs, would presumably be at least six sentences. You have five sentences here. It's a good bet, then, that somewhat more material ought to be provided. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 2080004 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 01:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not ready: See below. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: See below. Comments by reviewer: I'm readily finding passages here that are clearly source passages copied and "scuffed up". Don't do that; it produces close paraphrase that does not avoid plagiarism. While synthesis draws its facts from the sources, the presentation should be entirely original to you — your choice and arrangement of facts, your sentence and phrase structure, your words and turns of phrase, avoiding peculiar word choices and turns of phrase from the sources. After you've done all that, there's likely no significant similarity to the source presentation remaining, but as a sanity check, you shouldn't have more than three consecutive words identical to a source, with obvious exceptions like titles. See WN:PILLARS#own. Here, for example, the sentence starting "Traditional Aboriginal ..." is close paraphrase from the Euronews source, except for the final clause which is copied from the ABC source. That's just an example; I've readily found others and probably stopped before finding all of them. Rewrite to address all such problems before resubmitting. The article comes across rather bullet-like, with every paragraph being single-sentence. Although one-sentence paragraphs are sometimes okay, nothing but one-sentence paragraphs produces this bullet-like effect. "One thought, one paragraph" produces better flow. The article is a bit short. Consider the standard description of minimal length for a standalone article: "about three medium-sized paragraphs". Pretty clearly, a one-sentence paragraph is short; so content equivalent to three medium-sized paragraphs, however it's distributed into paragraphs, would presumably be at least six sentences. You have five sentences here. It's a good bet, then, that somewhat more material ought to be provided. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review of revision 2080154 [Not ready]

Revision 2080154 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 09:19, 22 October 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not ready: Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: " world famous, and UNESCO World Heritage Site, Sydney Opera House" and the first paragraph still look like a copy and paste scuffed up version of the Euronews article. This comes across clearly when reading the first sentence of each, and when comparing using this. There are likely other examples. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 2080154 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 09:19, 22 October 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not ready: Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: " world famous, and UNESCO World Heritage Site, Sydney Opera House" and the first paragraph still look like a copy and paste scuffed up version of the Euronews article. This comes across clearly when reading the first sentence of each, and when comparing using this. There are likely other examples. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.