Talk:US sanctions Israeli settler group and settlement outposts over West Bank violence
Review of revision 4805331 [Not ready]
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Revision 4805331 of this article has been reviewed by Michael.C.Wright (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 15:54, 20 November 2024 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: The headline should be changed. Calling Amana 'far-right' is subjective and none of the source articles call it a far-right organization. The article does not include any mention of arguments critical of the sanctions. Per WN:NPOV; "Neutral point of view means that an article should fairly represent all sides in a news story, and not make an article state, imply, or insinuate that any one side is correct." I also removed emotive language such as "slapped sanctions" and replaced it with neutral language such as "applied sanctions." In addition to the policy WN:NPOV, another good resource to read in order to better understand our goals with neutrality is the essay Wikinews:Neutrality. For important and controversial topics such as this one, we should also be very clear and accurate in our statements. For example, Amana was not sanctioned because it committed violence in the West Bank. According to Treasury.gov, it was sanctioned because it "is involved with [emphasis added] U.S.-sanctioned individuals and outposts that perpetrate violence in the West Bank..."[1] Our current headline implies Amana was directly involved in West Bank violence. Attribution is also needed. I can see no attribution made in prose. For example; the article does not say 'According to XXX...' Please also consider using some form of in-line citation, hidden or visible, to aid in the review process. {{verify}} can help both authors and reviewers. Use the Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 4805331 of this article has been reviewed by Michael.C.Wright (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 15:54, 20 November 2024 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: The headline should be changed. Calling Amana 'far-right' is subjective and none of the source articles call it a far-right organization. The article does not include any mention of arguments critical of the sanctions. Per WN:NPOV; "Neutral point of view means that an article should fairly represent all sides in a news story, and not make an article state, imply, or insinuate that any one side is correct." I also removed emotive language such as "slapped sanctions" and replaced it with neutral language such as "applied sanctions." In addition to the policy WN:NPOV, another good resource to read in order to better understand our goals with neutrality is the essay Wikinews:Neutrality. For important and controversial topics such as this one, we should also be very clear and accurate in our statements. For example, Amana was not sanctioned because it committed violence in the West Bank. According to Treasury.gov, it was sanctioned because it "is involved with [emphasis added] U.S.-sanctioned individuals and outposts that perpetrate violence in the West Bank..."[2] Our current headline implies Amana was directly involved in West Bank violence. Attribution is also needed. I can see no attribution made in prose. For example; the article does not say 'According to XXX...' Please also consider using some form of in-line citation, hidden or visible, to aid in the review process. {{verify}} can help both authors and reviewers. Use the Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |