Talk:Two killed, 47 injured in coach crash in Cornwall, England

Again this has the headline, shortened to fit, followed by a single-sentence, single-paragraph minor exposition of this. Who, what, where, when, why, and how can, and should, be explained in a two or three sentence lede paragraph. I find repetition of what the headline says mildly intellectually insulting; as if I've forgotten what the story is about by the time I click the link and it appears in front of me. This example fails to explain why, or at least most probable, reasons for the crash in that lede.

I would support banning this "non-content" contributing style in WN:SG, it's – in my opinion – simply used by newspapers as space filler, not something Wikinews should emulate. --Brian McNeil / ^talk 16:46, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

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