Talk:Saddam Hussein profited roughly 1B by taking funds from UN program

Edit news much?

Although on-line doesn't have the same length and space limitations as print, you should still write concisely and clearly. Comments inline.

Try this:

Saddam Hussein diverted millions of dollars from the United Nations oil-for-food program to families of suicide bombers from the West Bank and Gaza Strip, investigators claim. [Shorter lede, using active voice, important developments first. The bits about the bombing victims do not belong in the lede, or this brief. On what evidence does Volcker make this claim?]

Paul Volcker, a former American official investigating the diverted funds scandal, has taken [no need for "some"] heat from advocates [who?, when?] demanding that he haul United Nations personnel before the US Congress. Volcker claims that such open scrutiny could discourage them from cooperating with the investigation at all. He plans to release documentary evidence early next year, when his investigation is complete.

Magic5ball 05:32, 5 Dec 2004 (UTC)

I feel like this title is wrong

It seems to be grammatically incorrect. Shouldn't it be something like "Saddam Hussein profited roughly 1B with illicit UN program"? Also, it says "illicit UN program" which seems to be very POV- perhaps funds from mishandling of the program? "Saddam Hussein profited roughly 1B by taking funds from UN program"? Lyellin 00:26, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Thank you.--carlosar Nov 23 00:49:07 UTC 2004