Talk:Oldest user of Twitter, Ivy Bean, dies at 104
Review of revision 1067605 [Failed]
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Revision 1067605 of this article has been reviewed by Amgine (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 07:02, 29 July 2010 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Could barely finish reading it. This is a draft, not a publishable news article. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 1067605 of this article has been reviewed by Amgine (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 07:02, 29 July 2010 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Could barely finish reading it. This is a draft, not a publishable news article. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
How can anyone show bias towards this story, "Oldest Twit waists electricity by using internet" BKCW8 talk
- POV is not solely the case where one is advocating for/supporting an ideological or emotional position; it is also when one romanticizes a given set of events or actions, or otherwise makes statements of fact which are actually conjecture or opinion. For example, from this article:
- "Long thought to be the oldest user..."
- "who were all informed of her passing..."
- This sentence contains 3 statements of fact, which in fact are opinions or subjective statements: "Prior to being the oldest person on Twitter, in 2008 Bean became the oldest person on Facebook which is where she first became an internet phenomenon."
- "Among her fans and followers, were Peter Andre - who she had met and often talked about, and Chris Evans." <- While these persons may demonstrably be fans and followers, the statement implies value judgments about both the persons and that they would be fans/followers.
- - Amgine | t 07:30, 29 July 2010 (UTC)
I cant help but think you're being needlessly pedantic, but i'll try cleaning up the story to your liking BKCW8 talk 07:38, 29 July 2010 (UTC)
THERE! It has been bettered BKCW8 talk 08:13, 29 July 2010 (UTC)
Review of revision 1067890 [Passed]
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Revision 1067890 of this article has been reviewed by HJ Mitchell (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 16:34, 29 July 2010 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: All good. I gave it a copy edit and made some of the phrasing a bit less praising of her so it should be fine now. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 16:34, 29 July 2010 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 1067890 of this article has been reviewed by HJ Mitchell (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 16:34, 29 July 2010 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: All good. I gave it a copy edit and made some of the phrasing a bit less praising of her so it should be fine now. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 16:34, 29 July 2010 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Front-page worthy?
editThis doesn't seem like it is something that deserves to be in Lead 2. --Thunderhead (t - e - c) 04:51, 30 July 2010 (UTC)