Talk:Ethiopian prime minister Meles Zenawi dies at 57

Review of revision 1593164 [Not ready]

Revision 1593164 of this article has been reviewed by Brian McNeil (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 10:00, 21 August 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: The style guide mandates a minimum of three paragraphs. Comments by reviewer: The article could possibly be expanded by referring to Wikipedia for the sources they use on his article. But, do bear in mind you can't cut 'n' paste from Wikipedia, and would have to rewrite the life details taken from there in your own words. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 1593164 of this article has been reviewed by Brian McNeil (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 10:00, 21 August 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: The style guide mandates a minimum of three paragraphs. Comments by reviewer: The article could possibly be expanded by referring to Wikipedia for the sources they use on his article. But, do bear in mind you can't cut 'n' paste from Wikipedia, and would have to rewrite the life details taken from there in your own words. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Reviewing stuff

I've done an edit with the idea of reviewing it to make it more in line with the style guide. And then having done that, went oops! Possibility that I went to far to continue to qualify myself as a reviewer. I checked all the sources and did not find any plagiarism. The article reads as neutral enough to me though a bit concerned that the human rights abuses are not mentioned as a counter balance on the neutrality issue. I do not think there are copyright issues. The article is three paragraphs and written in more news style active voice.

Meles Zenawi, the Prime Minister of Ethiopia, died yesterday of an undisclosed illness at a Brussels hospital. This came after months of speculation about the health of the Ethiopian leader after he missed several high profile meetings in the last month. An Ethiopian government official reported a week prior to his death that Meles Zenawi was recovering well from his illness.

Zenawi ruled for more than 20 years after taking leadership from Mengistu Haile Mariam in 1991. His deputy Haile Mariam Desalegne, who is also the foreign minister, was appointed to occupy the Prime Minister's post in an acting capacity following the news.

Ethiopia's economy was transformed under Zenawi's leadership to place it to among the Africa's fastest growing with the Prime Minister serving as a key ally to the United States in fighting terrorism. During his time as head of state, several social, economic, religious and political developments and systems were established for the first time in Ethiopia. He is survived by one widow, Azeb Mesfin.

The first source remaining does confirm the above. The second source confirms most of that and the widow's name. Removed extra sources as un-neccesary.

The Human Rights issue is mentioned in several of these sources and for neutrality's sake, I think it needs to be in there. I am going to NOT pass this based on that alone. Add it and it should be passible.--LauraHale (talk) 12:25, 22 August 2012 (UTC)

Review of revision 1594598 [Not ready]

Revision 1594598 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 12:26, 22 August 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Not ready: The sources mention his human rights issues. These needs to be offered as balance. See additional commentary on the talk page. Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: I made a few edits to the article to speed up getting it ready in terms of style guide changes. These edits did not include changing the substance of the article. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 1594598 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 12:26, 22 August 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Not ready: The sources mention his human rights issues. These needs to be offered as balance. See additional commentary on the talk page. Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: I made a few edits to the article to speed up getting it ready in terms of style guide changes. These edits did not include changing the substance of the article. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

And I just realise... The fact found in the title? Not found in the article, though it is supported by the sources. This needs to be addressed by either a title change or adding it to the article. --LauraHale (talk) 12:27, 22 August 2012 (UTC)

Review of revision 1594598 [Passed]

Revision 1594998 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:50, 22 August 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: As a note, dates are relative. In reviewing, I again removed the exact date he died on because that is known based on the date it is published. I'll probably screw this up because easy peer review is categorically not working for me. This is also my second only pass so nervous about screwing it up.LauraHale (talk) 20:50, 22 August 2012 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1594998 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:50, 22 August 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: As a note, dates are relative. In reviewing, I again removed the exact date he died on because that is known based on the date it is published. I'll probably screw this up because easy peer review is categorically not working for me. This is also my second only pass so nervous about screwing it up.LauraHale (talk) 20:50, 22 August 2012 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.