Talk:China court jails three anti-corruption activists
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Revision 2700370 of this article has been reviewed by Bddpaux (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 17:13, 20 June 2014 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: An exceedingly well written article. A few tiny bits (just my opinion): I decided to let the lede pretty much stand as-is, but we normally want to note in a concrete way EXACTLY WHEN something happend (e.g. "On Thursday, a court in Xinyu, China........" We can, and sometimes use "recently" or "earlier this week", but we tend to hit WHEN rather overtly here. Also, the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs had a few bits that skirted awfully close to source....but I decided to let them slide. Remember that copying a source isn't just using the same wording, but we should also make certain we don't copy the exact flow of the source article's structure. Great work!! --Bddpaux (talk) 17:13, 20 June 2014 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 2700370 of this article has been reviewed by Bddpaux (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 17:13, 20 June 2014 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: An exceedingly well written article. A few tiny bits (just my opinion): I decided to let the lede pretty much stand as-is, but we normally want to note in a concrete way EXACTLY WHEN something happend (e.g. "On Thursday, a court in Xinyu, China........" We can, and sometimes use "recently" or "earlier this week", but we tend to hit WHEN rather overtly here. Also, the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs had a few bits that skirted awfully close to source....but I decided to let them slide. Remember that copying a source isn't just using the same wording, but we should also make certain we don't copy the exact flow of the source article's structure. Great work!! --Bddpaux (talk) 17:13, 20 June 2014 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |