Talk:Campaigners angry at new British police tracking system

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Revision 1230380 of this article has been reviewed by Fetchcomms (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 18:13, 12 May 2011 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Spelling

For clarity, program is the correct spelling when referring to software. This is unaffected by UK-US quirks.

Additionally, this was published with several spelling errors, and a concerning amount of very passive voice phrasing.

I would recommend checking on comma usage too; you should avoid starting a sentence with "But" - if you do, it should almost-always be followed with a comma. --Brian McNeil / ^talk 22:38, 15 May 2011 (UTC)