Comments:Vitamin D deficiency more common, serious, than thought

don't like title, but getting the news out is the main thing

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The current title is:Vitamin D deficiency more common, researchers say. This title doesn't reflect the first paragraph well-which tells the benefits of Vitamin D and thus the gravity of a deficiency, before telling about deficiency rates. In addition, I now think there needs to be a transitional phrase(such as "in addition") to start the sentence currently beginning:They say there is an emerging consensus... The reason I'm not making any changes though I originated the article is I'm a newbie, I don't know much about stylistic guidelines etc. Regards,130.86.14.87 05:12, 31 October 2007 (UTC)Richard L. Peterson 05:13, 31 October 2007 (UTC)