Talk:Crown Prince Sultan of Saudi Arabia dies

Review of revision 1307448 [Not ready]

Revision 1307448 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 05:31, 23 October 2011 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: I already cleaned up the unsupported claim of a precise age of death (the precise age was changed by an IP, but the sources don't give any precise age). I also removed the claim that he'd been in New York for treatment since 2009, because I didn't find either source saying when he started treatment there. But I also didn't find any mention that he was First Deputy Prime Minister. Both sources said Nayef was the second, but they don't say Sultan was the first. As I understand the sources, Nayef is not the next in line and therefore automatically the new crown prince. Apparently there is no fixed succession, and there's a council to officially decide who becomes crown prince; Nayef is merely who people think will be named. That uncertainty appears to be a pretty significant fact about the situation. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 1307448 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 05:31, 23 October 2011 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: I already cleaned up the unsupported claim of a precise age of death (the precise age was changed by an IP, but the sources don't give any precise age). I also removed the claim that he'd been in New York for treatment since 2009, because I didn't find either source saying when he started treatment there. But I also didn't find any mention that he was First Deputy Prime Minister. Both sources said Nayef was the second, but they don't say Sultan was the first. As I understand the sources, Nayef is not the next in line and therefore automatically the new crown prince. Apparently there is no fixed succession, and there's a council to officially decide who becomes crown prince; Nayef is merely who people think will be named. That uncertainty appears to be a pretty significant fact about the situation. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

• First Deputy PM source
• In NY since 2009
• Says he was 80

Review of revision 1307710 [Passed]

Revision 1307710 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 14:05, 23 October 2011 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Hopefully, in future we can avoid this confusion over sources. Choose acceptable sources before beginning to write, list them all, and don't include anything not verified by them. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1307710 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 14:05, 23 October 2011 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Hopefully, in future we can avoid this confusion over sources. Choose acceptable sources before beginning to write, list them all, and don't include anything not verified by them. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.