Talk:Barcelona footballer Éric Abidal to undergo liver transplant

Review of revision 1437090 [Passed]

Revision 1437090 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:00, 16 March 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Some passages were too close to source; avoid runs of more that three consecutive words from a source (with "common-sense" exceptions, like titles), also avoid copying distinctive turns of phrase, and seek to use different phrase/sentence structure. The bigger problem (measured in word count, even) was failing to source most of the content of the second-to-last paragraph. Review choice was between finding the article not-ready; or ruthlessly deleting the unverified majority of the paragraph and publishing, thus starting a 24-hour clock to add sourced suitable replacement for the deleted text. For better or worse, I've chosen the latter course. The article would definitely be stronger with some material in the middle of that second-to-last paragraph about the significance of Abidal to the team. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1437090 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:00, 16 March 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Some passages were too close to source; avoid runs of more that three consecutive words from a source (with "common-sense" exceptions, like titles), also avoid copying distinctive turns of phrase, and seek to use different phrase/sentence structure. The bigger problem (measured in word count, even) was failing to source most of the content of the second-to-last paragraph. Review choice was between finding the article not-ready; or ruthlessly deleting the unverified majority of the paragraph and publishing, thus starting a 24-hour clock to add sourced suitable replacement for the deleted text. For better or worse, I've chosen the latter course. The article would definitely be stronger with some material in the middle of that second-to-last paragraph about the significance of Abidal to the team. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.