Talk:Anonymous people reveal animal cruelty at Australian Inghams poultry producer factory using CCTV footage

Review of revision 1850112 [Not ready]

Revision 1850112 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 05:02, 21 March 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not ready: The lead paragraph does not make clear why this is news now. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not ready: The video is shocking according to whom? Shocking is not neutral. There are other non-neutral words. These need to be purged. Style: Not ready: There are external links in the article text. Comments by reviewer: Adding Wikinews links and Wikipedia links to aid in article clarity would be nice. An information box would also be nice. External links need to be removed from the article. SMH should be spelled out for an international audience and then put into italics. The lead should identify which abattoir in Sydney's south-west is involved. There should be greater use of active voice. Beyond non-neutral words like shocking and distressing, this reads a bit like an Animal Liberation press release to push their agenda. Something needs to be done to address this. A picture, while not required, would be nice. An infobox, while not required, would be nice. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 1850112 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 05:02, 21 March 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not ready: The lead paragraph does not make clear why this is news now. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not ready: The video is shocking according to whom? Shocking is not neutral. There are other non-neutral words. These need to be purged. Style: Not ready: There are external links in the article text. Comments by reviewer: Adding Wikinews links and Wikipedia links to aid in article clarity would be nice. An information box would also be nice. External links need to be removed from the article. SMH should be spelled out for an international audience and then put into italics. The lead should identify which abattoir in Sydney's south-west is involved. There should be greater use of active voice. Beyond non-neutral words like shocking and distressing, this reads a bit like an Animal Liberation press release to push their agenda. Something needs to be done to address this. A picture, while not required, would be nice. An infobox, while not required, would be nice. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

• Adding Wikinews links and Wikipedia links to aid in article clarity would be nice.
  • Done.
• An information box would also be nice.
  • Not sure?
• External links need to be removed from the article.
  • Done.
• SMH should be spelled out for an international audience and then put into italics.
  • Done (not in italics, but still).
• The lead should identify which abattoir in Sydney's south-west is involved.
  • Not done (I didn't find out...).
• There should be greater use of active voice.
  • Done.
• Beyond non-neutral words like shocking and distressing, this reads a bit like an Animal Liberation press release to push their agenda. Something needs to be done to address this.
  • Done.
• A picture, while not required, would be nice.
  • Done.
• An infobox, while not required, would be nice.
  • Added {{Australia}}.

--Gryllida 05:16, 21 March 2013 (UTC)

Now found the place too.. --Gryllida 05:19, 21 March 2013 (UTC)

Review of revision 1850181 [Passed]

Revision 1850181 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:17, 21 March 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: NPOV issues gives me some pause but not sure how that can be done easily with a topic like this. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1850181 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:17, 21 March 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: NPOV issues gives me some pause but not sure how that can be done easily with a topic like this. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.